Beast's Sampler (unfinished)

[Beast]

I have created this sampler primarily for my Film Studies coursework though I'll definitely release the final version out to the parkour community.
This is what my sampler looks like so far...

www.youtube.com/watch?v=4w5GUgIMPLQ

Could people please post up any criticism of the video no matter how small or picky it is, I'd like to hear it as I want this vid to be as good as I can make it.

Note. In the final cut, all the parkour bits will mostly remain as it is here (unless you see fault in it) but the bit at the beginning will be extended. I'll run though my plan for the extended scenes if requested...

Cheers

[Maverick]

What the hell happened to you mate?

You move so smoothly, so fearlessly! I always knew you had skills but you really look like a true traceur these days. There's a lot encouraging me to come back to England, but most of all I'd like to see everyone's skills firsthand, including yours. And the reason is in this video. Nice one!

Anyway, about the criticism. With a title like "Lonely Day" you'll want to emphasize your soloing. You're the focus of the film, yet there are a few shots with a second guy doing something behind you or a crowd cheering you on. So basically it's just a storyline fault. It doesn't look to me like a showing-off vid but a story. So touch that up and this will be sick. I can't wait to see more Beast, keep it up!

EDIT: I forgot to mention that I had a very difficult time reading the note at the beginning. Maybe you should reshoot that note part.

[fogs]

Really nice Beasty boy, can tell it's gonna be a cracker when it's finished. All looks veryinteresting and well put together so far.

[jungle]

nahhhh man, thats was just to good!
i known you since when u first started, and i can remember wen u thought doing a lazy was the hardest move and u were out of breath just trying to learn them... now look at you, doing kongs with almost perfect form, even getting some distance in the jump take-off in some of them. in all the people who have improved i dont think any of them have done as well as you (tho there are close calls)
well done for sticking through it, well done on the achievements u have accomplished so far and who knows, u keep this up, this time next year i might even have tricking almost done.
three words for you my man...
determination, percivere, self-belief.
you have them all!
well done cant wait for the rest!!! OH yeah nice editing on the roofs bits!!

[Rabbit]

nice vid man i loved it hey yougot to show me were those roofs are

[Beast]

They are the Orpington Roofs, but during the filming of this we got shouted at by the people inside so we might have to steer clear of that hotspot for a while to avoid further action being taken.

[Danny]

Really love the video. The only thing I didn't like was the way some things were repeated in slow motion like the kong over the wall by the thames.

[ef1]

really nice vid, cant wait till its finished its going to be another f.s. cracker

[pkpete]

such a simple video all the moves are smooth your kongs are always swish but it looks like your rolls hurt alot but i dunno what you could do about that